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1st Pokémon Fan Fiction Contest - WINNER=GRIFFINHEART

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griffinheart

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i dont want to type it up! clover, do you mind scanned pages? that would be a lot easier


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Yes, that's fine. As long as we can read it :3

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djmo76

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I'll join


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Heres my entry

Deoxys was looking on every planet he can,until he went back to his home planet for a brake.He layed down in the middle of a forest.He closed his eyes, remembering everything he went through looking for his trainer.He remembered when he went into a chamber that only opend if you've sufferd great emotional sadness.After entering the iner sanctom, he was blind sighted by a powerful shadow claw atack,the atack was so powerful that it left a scar on the side of his face.Then he looked up,it was gengar,he should have known!In a mater of moments,Deoxys launched a very powerful hyper beam. Gengar was knocked out.Deoxys went over to him and yelled"WHERE IS HE,WHERE IS MY Trainer!".Gengar whisperd"do you think that i'm going to tell you,no.that information stays with me, even...when...i'm...standing...at...the...gates...of hell."Gengar was gone.At first,Deoxys second guessed him self,but then,he then he stoped,then with his head hung low, he left.Deoxes opend his eyes and said"My trainer, I vow to find and destroy everyone who has ever wronged you,and then i will find you.".


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I've added the 2 entries to the OP. It's a clickable link that brings you to "google docs" for easier reading. Enjoy!

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griffinheart

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okay, i have it. you might have to zoom in a bit though. if you cant read something, just ask me what it is. please include the plot summary of previous events in my entry



for to to really understand the story, you need to know what happened earlier, so here's a brief plot summary: Conway is walking towards sunnyshore city to see the munchlax rock when suddenly he runs into a man who amazingly was steven stone. Steven was also heading to see the rock, so the two joined up. meanwhile, paul is training his pokemon along the side of a river. also at the same while, barry is running through the forest on the verge of tears after loosing terribly to volkner. suddenly,, hit by a stray accidental attack, paul is sent flying into the river. he cant swim and neither can any of his pokemon. barry hears the commosion and rushes over. he sees his idol and dives to the rescue, but there's a problem- he cant swim either! walking along, conway and steven hear the splashes and come to investigate. conway gets the two out with his Slowking's psychic. barry is fine but paul is unconsious. steven does CPR and paul comes around. paul knows who steven is and starts being a complete jerk. he challenges steven... and this is where out story begins...


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cool ^^ A little long obviously, but I'll add you to the OP tonight.

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Clover

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How's Mir567 doing on her story?

and asension? ^^

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Loren

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can you reserve a spot for me?
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here is my story ><


Jirachi’s Tale
One peaceful evening, Jirachi was just napping on a cloud. ”well, I better get moving..”Jirachi gave a fiant yawn and flew off to the ground. Jirachi had plucked a juicy big red apple. She took four big bites and shockingly finished it. As Jirachi spent the day playing, it came to a end. Just as Jirachi fell asleep she heard a whisk. “WHISK!” Jirachi heard it again. “Scizor!!” Jirachi had already fallen a sleep, so Jirachi’s last resort was to fight in its sleep.”Scizor…..” Jirachi had won. Jirachi woke up. “on no!!!” Jirachi had healed Scizor and let him go. Jirachi learned, even if she was not awake, she is a little lethal weapon . Jirachi had done a boring daily things and this time , Jirachi had watched a glowing Sunset. Jirachi’s third eye had opened. Jirachi could now rest nicely on the star for another one thousand years. Jirachi, befour going to sleep had a slight smile. Jirachi….. Resting now.


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I like Katya's printing!
My printing/writing is round-ish. Razz


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asension and mir..................I'd like to start voting on this now. How much more time do you need?

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SharlottCrain

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katya's story...so long...


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griffinheart

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@SharlottCrain wrote:katya's story...so long...

lol, it's best if you read my little summary of previous events before you read my acutal story (it's where i posted my entry); you might be a little confused otherwise.



@clover, mir says she might drop out


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ooooooh, ok then


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if you didnt ready it, you'd be like: "Uhhh.... what just happened?"


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............................................................

today's winter right?
it's summer here now <-----changing the subject


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mir is almost done with hers. she just pretty much needs to type it up


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mir's entry done. i just need to type it up



Last edited by griffinheart on Tue Dec 08, 2009 10:20 pm; edited 1 time in total


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okay >_<;;
Does she not have a computer?

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she does, but i offered to do it Smile


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Okay! I'm here! Here's the link. http://docs.google.com/Doc?docid=0AamVb9diI8p5ZGRtbXN4aHRfMGdyd25jOGN6&hl=en
I'm finally done! Very Happy

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Very Happy WOOT! *high-fives*


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i had a hard time choosing cos they're prety long.
especially griffin's.
alright, back to the point,
1st Griffin's
2nd Loren's
3rd Genna's

good luck peoplez


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well, it's a habit of mine to pick out mistakes and such in stories, so i'll give little statements on what everybody could improve


1. mir - SAID IS DEAD. as you got further in, you used 'said' a lot. there's something called a thesorus
2. Jenna - if you're going to use a lot of dialog, don't just do it as strait dialod. put in some descriptions somewhere in all that talk.
3. Loren - paragraphs! there were some things that needed to be capitalized. and those last 2 sentances didnt make much sense. with this sent: "Jirachi, befour going to sleep had a slight smile." I suggest reversing the order.


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anybody going to vote???


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